October Girl

hello desrie, welcome to YWS! I'm Max, like Suz said if you need help feel free to PM people =) -Max

(Marc Luna) "No... I'm sorry." I said again. "But-" Tears welled up in her eyes. "I can't.... I won't lose you down there. You have to stay here. I'll be ...

Jessica "You idiot now we're both bleeding!" I shrieked "It..... it's was suppose to save you... how could it not?" He asked. "I just turned two hours ago of course ...

Hmm, very interesting i think this is very good.... very good indeed. Never heard or read a poem about the sun this was very good.

ARCI I laughed, it was an actual laugh. "Save the warning for someone who isn't well armed." I said, I tried to keep walking, but my legs wouldn't move. *thanks ...

Jessica "Stop..." he didn't. "Stop..." Nothing. "Stop!" Yelled and pushed his hand away. My stomach kept clenching and unclenching. Blood pouring from it. I whimpered...

Jessica I started to shake... just kidding. I'd never heard his voice do that before. Something in his voice brought me back to earth, I was me again, but it ...

Jessica I punched him, making his neck snap. He tried to dig his hand into my stomach but I dodged him "That moves' old get a new one." I smiled. ...

Jessica "I'm not that weak. Don't underestimate me, you've made that mistake before.... don't do it again." I blinked. When he slammed me into the ground I heard a snap, ...

OMG! I love this I mean usually I have more to say than OMG! But right now I'm breathless... This was really good I mean just the way everything was ...

um riiiight um well sure dude

Jessica I blinked and ended up on his back. I felt my eyes burning and blood pouring out of my stomach. I gripped his neck from behind.... ah damn that ...

****I am so lost here..... anyone wanna bring me in?****

(Jessica) I hid behind the bush with an evil smile plastetred across my face. "How should we kill him?" I whispered. He sighed. "Jess, what's wrong with you?" I turned ...

Ooooh I like it, very good very good indeed. I could feel the emotion and the character... swell, jolly good show. I enjoyed it ^_^ -Max